This is my 'About Me' Slide. Everyone in my class is doing an 'About me' project and I chose to do a slide. Please give me feedback after you've gone through the slide :)
Thank you Ariana for sharing this DLO. It is nice to read about what your favourite pursuits and foods are. I would enjoy it even more if you explained why they are your favourites. It is the extra detail that will capture your audience's interest and make them want to come back to read your next blog post.
I am looking forward to your next (detailed) blog post.
Hi Ariana, I am Lara and I go to Papakura Central School and I am a year 6. Your all about me is really good. What is your favourite spot in school? Bye. Lara
Hi Ariana, I'm Bella from Papakura central school and I am a year 6. I really liked your all about me slide. I also really liked how you added extra information like how you did for your friends. It is just that extra information which makes it even better! also my hobbies are cheerleading. Great writing from you about all about me. Blog you later, Bella.
Hi Bella, Thanks for commenting on my blog, I enjoyed reading the comment you wrote. I haven't done cheerleading before, but it looks really fun. Are there any other sports or hobbies you like?
Hi Ariana, I really like how in the first slide you incorporated photo's that represent you. I also like how you have tones of information about yourself. You look like you are really sporty and have lots of friends.
hi there ariana my name is chloe from yms school, I love how you ask questions in your slide and I love gymnastics to and I play softball and hockey. maybe next time write in a different font because I cant really read it,the interesting part of it was I did not know this about you.
great!I like how you did those really pretty backrounds it really helps your slide and story about you. how long did it take you to make to make this? I also have ababy sister in the way but yours is a boy and mine is a girl.
Thank you Ariana for sharing this DLO. It is nice to read about what your favourite pursuits and foods are. I would enjoy it even more if you explained why they are your favourites. It is the extra detail that will capture your audience's interest and make them want to come back to read your next blog post.
ReplyDeleteI am looking forward to your next (detailed) blog post.
Hi Ariana,
ReplyDeleteI am Lara and I go to Papakura Central School and I am a year 6. Your all about me is really good. What is your favourite spot in school?
Bye.
Lara
Hi Lara,
DeleteThanks for taking the time to comment on my blog. My favourite sports at school are netball and football. What are yours?
Thanks,
Ariana, Yaldhurst Model School.
Hi Ariana,
ReplyDeleteI'm Bella from Papakura central school and I am a year 6.
I really liked your all about me slide. I also really liked how you added extra information like how you did for your friends. It is just that extra information which makes it even better! also my hobbies are cheerleading. Great writing from you about all about me.
Blog you later, Bella.
Hi Bella,
DeleteThanks for commenting on my blog, I enjoyed reading the comment you wrote. I haven't done cheerleading before, but it looks really fun. Are there any other sports or hobbies you like?
Thanks,
Ariana, Yaldhurst Model School.
Hi Ariana,
ReplyDeleteI really like how in the first slide you incorporated photo's that represent you. I also like how you have tones of information about yourself. You look like you are really sporty and have lots of friends.
Kind Regards Grace (Your best friend)
Hi Grace,
DeleteThanks for taking the time to comment on my blog.
Bye!
Ariana
hi there ariana my name is chloe from yms school, I love how you ask questions in your slide and I love gymnastics to and I play softball and hockey. maybe next time write in a different font because I cant really read it,the interesting part of it was I did not know this about you.
ReplyDeletegreat!I like how you did those really pretty backrounds it really helps your slide and story about you. how long did it take you to make to make this? I also have ababy sister in the way but yours is a boy and mine is a girl.
king regards chloe king from yms