Hi my name is Mr Breach and I am one of the teachers from the West Wing (Room 7&8) at South Hornby School. I was amazed at how powerful your metaphors were in this poem because each one painted a detailed picture of your cat. Is Queenie your inspiration in any other way? I have a cat that looks exactly like Queenie but his name is Norman!
Great slide show Ariana I loved it and I like how you put lots of slides. I am Natalia and I go to South Hornby School and I am a Year 5 in room 5. and I also loved you metaphores. we do poetry at South Hornby School. as well and I also loved your adjectives and I liked how you had one slide saying what was on the next slide as well.I also loved you backgrounds to because they related to the work or the subject and they had bright colors and they were really cool I can't say how much I loved you slide show!!!!!!!! and all of your slide show made sense and it had lots lots of detail. for next time you could write a bit more.How long did it take you to do it?
Hello Ariana your poems are really cool you are really good at thinking of poems. The one that I like the most was the one about brother’s in that one I think you were right, brother’s are annoying. Next time I think you should create a poem about things that you really like.
Well done Ariana I'm Lauren and I love how you talked all about the cat. I Loved the details! I have a cat at home and it is also like a lot of the things you mentioned. It is perfect that you don’t have to change anything! What breed is Queenie? This is my blog link shslaurena.blogspot.co.nz Please check it out!
Hello and good work Ariana I love the different poems you have written on your blog. You are very creative. I love the lolly poem. It makes me hungry and want to eat lollies. I like the rhyming in the first two lines. Are you going to make some more poems?
I really enjoyed reading your Cinquain about Ariana. She sounds as if she is a fun person to be around. Does the picture you chose reflect Ariana’s personality?
I am a student at SHS. I like the way that you have used a lot of describing words and I like how you have picked appropriate backgrounds thanks but I think you should write a bit more next time so we can learn more about your cats
Well done Ariana, I loved your adjectives and metaphors you put in. You put a lot of effort into it. Queenie looks like a great cat to have as a pet. Another great job and well done. I think you should change the front to like the theme of the slide show. Next time try get a theme to what your doing. Also my school blog link is http://shsaleshat.blogspot.co.nz/ please check it out!
1.How old is your cat Queenie? 2.How old is your brother?
Hi Ariana I am a Year 5 student from South Hornby School I like how you put a lot of effort into your blog it must of took a long time to do all of those poems.I liked how you put adjectives into your poem.If i could give you a % on this presentatin it would be 100%.I like the licking lollies poem My favourite lolly is coke bottles whats yours.This is also my blog http://shsrobbiee.blogspot.co.nz/.
Kia ora Ariana i am a student from south hornby school. I thought your Queenie poetry was really good i liked how you have described Queenie like she is a germ spreading all over the house and she is a lion fierce in day and smoochy at night. How old is Queenie? Could you check out my blog http://shsbraydena.blogspot.co.nz/
Kiaora I am from South Hornby School. I saw your poems and they are nice and not too long. I especially like your tree poem. Quick question... is Queenie your cat? Also the colour in black on the Queenie poem is hard to read. It would be a good idea to change it to white.
Kia Ora, my name is Abigail from Waikowhai Primary school. I really like the poems, especially the haiku. I love writing, so this reminds me of the poetry competition we have done this week. I think you could put some information about the poetry anthology on top of your work. I wonder how you write your poems cause I find it hard to make one? Great Job!
Hi my name is Mr Breach and I am one of the teachers from the West Wing (Room 7&8) at South Hornby School. I was amazed at how powerful your metaphors were in this poem because each one painted a detailed picture of your cat. Is Queenie your inspiration in any other way? I have a cat that looks exactly like Queenie but his name is Norman!
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ReplyDeleteGreat slide show Ariana I loved it and I like how you put lots of slides. I am Natalia and I go to South Hornby School and I am a Year 5 in room 5. and I also loved you metaphores. we do poetry at South Hornby School. as well and I also loved your adjectives and I liked how you had one slide saying what was on the next slide as well.I also loved you backgrounds to because they related to the work or the subject and they had bright colors and they were really cool I can't say how much I loved you slide show!!!!!!!! and all of your slide show made sense and it had lots lots of detail. for next time you could write a bit more.How long did it take you to do it?
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ReplyDeleteHello Ariana your poems are really cool you are really good at thinking of poems. The one that I like the most was the one about brother’s in that one I think you were right, brother’s are annoying. Next time I think you should create a poem about things that you really like.
ReplyDeleteWell done Ariana I'm Lauren and I love how you talked all about the cat. I Loved the details! I have a cat at home and it is also like a lot of the things you mentioned. It is perfect that you don’t have to change anything! What breed is Queenie? This is my blog link shslaurena.blogspot.co.nz Please check it out!
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ReplyDeleteHello and good work Ariana I love the different poems you have written on your blog. You are very creative. I love the lolly poem. It makes me hungry and want to eat lollies. I like the rhyming in the first two lines. Are you going to make some more poems?
I really enjoyed reading your Cinquain about Ariana. She sounds as if she is a fun person to be around. Does the picture you chose reflect Ariana’s personality?
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ReplyDeleteI am a student at SHS. I like the way that you have used a lot of describing words and I like how you have picked appropriate backgrounds thanks but I think you should write a bit more next time so we can learn more about your cats
Well done Ariana, I loved your adjectives and metaphors you put in. You put a lot of effort into it. Queenie looks like a great cat to have as a pet. Another great job and well done. I think you should change the front to like the theme of the slide show. Next time try get a theme to what your doing. Also my school blog link is http://shsaleshat.blogspot.co.nz/ please check it out!
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Hi Ariana I am a Year 5 student from South Hornby School I like how you put a lot of effort into your blog it must of took a long time to do all of those poems.I liked how you put adjectives into your poem.If i could give you a % on this presentatin it would be 100%.I like the licking lollies poem My favourite lolly is coke bottles whats yours.This is also my blog http://shsrobbiee.blogspot.co.nz/.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Ariana i am a student from south hornby school. I thought your Queenie poetry was really good i liked how you have described Queenie like she is a germ spreading all over the house and she is a lion fierce in day and smoochy at night. How old is Queenie? Could you check out my blog http://shsbraydena.blogspot.co.nz/
ReplyDeleteKiaora I am from South Hornby School. I saw your poems and they are nice and not too long. I especially like your tree poem. Quick question... is Queenie your cat? Also the colour in black on the Queenie poem is hard to read. It would be a good idea to change it to white.
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Kia Ora, my name is Abigail from Waikowhai Primary school. I really like the poems, especially the haiku. I love writing, so this reminds me of the poetry competition we have done this week. I think you could put some information about the poetry anthology on top of your work. I wonder how you write your poems cause I find it hard to make one? Great Job!
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